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May 3, 2012

"The Writer's Voice"

Yay! I've made it into "The Writer's Voice" contest held over at Mother.Write.Repeat (love her blog, btw).

So, for the contest, here is the plot summary for my current manuscript and the first 250 words:


Plot Summary
Twelve-year-old Anna Fraser once heard that necessity is the mother of invention, but for her, it was all accidental.  
After suckering Chris, her genius younger brother, into doing their school project over Christmas break, Anna has the best vacation ever— a cheerleading team party, a family trip to Disney, and not a single care in the world… Until their project is missing the night before school starts. 
In their panic, they create a tasty invention that will revolutionize kids’ lives all across the world— a spray that makes any food (cafeteria food, vegetables, etc.) taste like cupcakes. Soon, Yuck Away Cupcake Spray becomes the hottest-selling product in America and Anna and Chris are running a company.  
As CEO, Anna quickly discovers that business is not all about having her teammates work for her, or bossing around her brother, or even doing interviews with the local news stations. Nope. It’s working long hours in the office, doing homework past midnight, and maybe even disappointing her cheerleading team by missing the biggest competition of the year.  
Toss in a bet with some bullies, a scheming Chief Operating Officer, and a threat to their family’s financial future, and you have KIDS, INC., a middle grade novel complete at 35,000.

First 250
Anna Fraser tapped her foot against the metal leg of her desk to the song in her head:
Deck the halls with boughs of holly
Fa, la, la, la, la, la, la, la, la.
Four more classes, then I'm jolly
Fa, la, la, la, la, la, la, la, la.
Christmas break is almost here
Fa, la, la, la, la, la, la, la, la.
No more homework for the rest of the year
Fa, la, la, la, la, la, la, la, la.
She added the dull drumming of her pencil as it beat on the thick social studies book that sat open to page 241: Economics. Twenty more minutes. She glanced up at her social studies teacher, Mr. Bower, aka. Mr Shower, and beat a little louder on the book to the rhythm of his lecture. 
“Economics,” he was saying, or rather spraying. 
Tap tap-tap tap
“Is the study of buying and selling goods and services.” 
Tap tap tap-tap tap tap-tap tap tap-tap tap-tap-tap 
Anna couldn’t believe he was actually trying to make them learn on the last day of school before Christmas break. Her other teachers let them watch movies, read books, and even have a holiday party. She’d scored four candy canes already. And there, Mr. Shower stood at the front of the class reading from his notes, his beady eyes not lifting from the yellow memo pad clenched between his chunks of fingers. He continued earnestly, wiping the corner of his mouth every now and then. 

If you've had an opportunity to enter, May the Odds Ever be in Your Favor! 

38 Comments:

Sarah Ahiers said...

Woo hoo! Congrats for making it in! It was kind of crazy there for like 10 seconds

Matthew MacNish said...

So excited you made it in, Robyn! I've never seen a linky list fill up that fast. They almost broke the internet.

Adam Oster said...

Good Luck!

Michael Offutt, Tebow Cult Initiate said...

Congratulations on your success thus far. I hope you pwn the competition.

Becca C. said...

Fellow Writers Voice entrant checking in - howdy!

This sounds so fun and clever! Good luck in the contest!

Jennie Bailey said...

Congrats on making it in! Just stopped by to wish you luck. This is the first MG that I've come across - and I really enjoyed reading it!

Alaskan Ninja said...

Sounds super cute. Best of luck from TWV #30!

Sarah Wedgbrow said...

This sounds fantastic! My 10-year old would love it (not just the cupcake spray).

Dahlia said...

The first MG entry I've seen and it's so cute! Good luck!

Ann Bedichek said...

Yay for MG! And what a fun first 250!

Loralie Hall said...

Love this concept, and your delivery. Congratulations on making the list, best of luck with your fantastic entry ^_^

Sarah said...

So adorable! Love the premise and the voice. Good luck!

-Sarah #146

Carrie-Anne said...

It sounds like a really cute concept, though I'm not so sure about the title. Kids Inc. was a pretty popular Eighties and early Nineties show.

Adam Oster said...

I know so little about current MG novels going around, but I have to say I'm really enjoying the voice in your opening pages.
Once again, good luck!

April Wall said...

One contestant to another stopping by to say good luck! Yay for MG entries!

SueJay said...

Like the voice. Also I think I need some of that cupcake spray :)

Good luck to you!

Kimberly Gabriel said...

Stopping by to say good luck in the contest! Great query - drew me right in. Great concept!

lisathewordnerd said...

I think my 10 year old would love it too!

Lisa (#59)

Tristina said...

I want to read this! Good luck!!

Elizabeth said...

Robin! I'm so excited you're in!! You already know this, but I'll say it again: My kids are STILL dying to read this book. Can't wait to hold it in my hands. ;)

Brenda Drake said...

I want you on my team - ignore all other judges - jk - I love this premise and write MG. Win!

Brenda Drake said...

Doh! I meant "I" write MG.

Melissa said...

Go Robyn!! Love this premise :)

Carrie Butler said...

Oo, I want some Yuck Away Cupcake Spray! :) Good luck, Robyn!

Cherie Larkins said...

I want my own Yuck Away Cupcake Spray! Pretty please??

:D Good luck!

H. E. Gryphus said...

Yay. Congrats. I can't wait to read this, it sounds great.

erica m. chapman said...

Love this!! What an awesome idea. CONGRATS on Brenda picking you for her team!

Jamie Corrigan said...

Congrats for being picked for team Brenda!!! :)

TYHatch said...

Congrats! This sounds like a lot of fun. And I'm sure this adult would like cupcake spray at times. lol

Tina (#194)

Kimberly Gabriel said...

Congrats on getting picked! I really enjoyed reading this entry. As a middle school teacher, I have MANY kids who would be all about reading this book. Good luck as the contest continues!

C.G.Ayling said...

I started smiling at the end of your query's first sentence and didn't stop till I finished reading.
Even the song in the first 250 didn't put me off - though I sighed at the first line, then immediately smiled as I realized this was a corrupt version of the melody.
Nice work, and good luck!

Nicole Zoltack said...

Good luck!

Carolyn Abiad said...

Best of luck!
Carolyn, #157

Brandi M. Lynch said...

Congrats! This is cute!

Brandi #199

Emily White said...

That is amazing! This sounds so good. :)

Matthew MacNish said...

Congrats on getting picked, Robyn!

George Anthony Kulz said...

What a fun and funny concept! No wonder you were picked! Continued success!

-George (#49)

Jenny Kaczorowski said...

Stopping by to wish you luck from another member of #TeamBrenda! I love the idea of a cupcake spray! This would have been right up my alley as a kid - and I think you did a great job capturing that MG voice.

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